I had a really rough weekend...This was the result, Not even sure what it is... Don't think it's quite poetry...It sucks, i know but i just want someone else to see it for some reason... Judge honestly.----------------------------------------Are you blind to see?I never gave a fuck what they thought of me.Look at me, Tell me you love me...Tell me you don't hate me?How can i trust you, Now that i know you?Nothing meant more than you.Do you not know what it took?For me to say i love you?To say i trusted you.Now, i see you for you.You've shown me why I hate people so.Your true nature, it disgusts me.I took, You gave, Your breathe, Please save.You won't, You can'thave the satisfaction of these tears.I want you to know, I love you,I fear i always will.and for that, i hate you.
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This probably isn't the place...
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It sucks
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one thing about poetry, you can say only one word, but as long you know what you meant by that, then to youself, those are the greatest words of expression, i don't veiw poetry as something someone else can judge, it is something that is great as long as it is coming directly from u.......btwi think your peom is really good.....
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I disagree with your opinions on poetry. Good poetry is that which can successfully express and transplant what emotions you feel onto the reader.
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AIB, could I reccamend www.deviantart.com. YGet an account there and submit your poetry. You will get comments and constructive criticism from people who appreciate what your trying to do, and thus your abilities will grow. Thats if you want to write more poetry that is. I'd reccamend it, its very fullfilling.
Oh and let me know if you do submit any poetry there so I can see :wink:
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In reply to: I disagree with your opinions on poetry. Good poetry is that which can successfully express and transplant what emotions you feel onto the reader. agreed...its all about transfering over an empathetic feeling as to let whoever your reading it to know exactlly where your coming from.
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A man of culture ye be!